Saturday, September 7, 2013

daily haiku, Sept 8th

an airplane back home
to my girl, who I don't love
I hate connections

Got this idea from: "Take this Waltz", a great movie... the haiku needs some work

1 comment:

  1. The key to haikus are, I think, the juxtaposition of two ideas in one word...

    Above, the "connections" meaning airplane connections and personal relationships... but, it's a bit clumsy in this one.

    Some of my more successful haikus that use this are:

    sexy medusa
    looks at him seductively
    he becomes rock hard


    the nudes on the wall
    at the new art gallery
    are very well hung

    I'm always looking for a new double meaning for a haiku, especially if it makes it funny. :)